messy but I kind like the bikes and green wall. Inside of the window seems messy, the right hand side would be nice cropped but you would lose part of the car that reflects. just kinda look messy but still this old fashioned feel to it I kinda like.
It doesn't quite hang together for me either. I think a tighter crop would be better - there's just too much happening on the sides and top. It's a good concept that's worth a little work.
I think a polarising filter would have helped this photo. IMO, the reflections are distracting and reducing them would simplify things and so allow the viewer to concentrate to be on the important things.