C&C please! thx

lunch.box. · Apr 7, 2013

texkam · Apr 7, 2013

Softer lighting, flag your flash in #1 and quit breaking the law.

Rebekah5280 · Apr 7, 2013

I kinda like them both, though, I'm not sure whats up with the facemask. lol
I would have brightened up the background a little in the first one and brought the light up higher to fall above the subjects head instead of assaulting him so harshly from the side. The OCD in me would have also placed the subject in the center of the tracks instead of slightly off to the side.
The second is the same, I would have brought up the light to fall down instead of from the side and also to avoid such a harsh shadow right behind the subject.
I also like a more saturated look, but that's just personal preference.
These are just suggestions, and maybe not what you were going for.

OLaA · Apr 7, 2013

The first one has some potential. I don't think the angle you went for really works. It could have been a lot more interesting if you got the camera lower, and had your model pose exactly in the middle of the bridge. Being off to camera right bothers me a bit. The pose also leaves something to be desired.

# 2 I just don't get. I see the graffiti and there's a gas mask and a guy in a tie. Nothing really comes together especially since the model isn't engaging the camera in anyway.

I can see you were going for something different with the gas mask and tie. I think in a different environment it could have had more of an impact. Maybe the model doing something normal in this attire would gain more interest. Sitting at a bistro having a cup of coffee. Bring the framing in close to catch some details off the mask etc... Not sure if any of that would work I'm just throwing ideas out there.

lunch.box. · Apr 7, 2013

OLaA said:
The first one has some potential. I don't think the angle you went for really works. It could have been a lot more interesting if you got the camera lower, and had your model pose exactly in the middle of the bridge. Being off to camera right bothers me a bit. The pose also leaves something to be desired.

# 2 I just don't get. I see the graffiti and there's a gas mask and a guy in a tie. Nothing really comes together especially since the model isn't engaging the camera in anyway.

I can see you were going for something different with the gas mask and tie. I think in a different environment it could have had more of an impact. Maybe the model doing something normal in this attire would gain more interest. Sitting at a bistro having a cup of coffee. Bring the framing in close to catch some details off the mask etc... Not sure if any of that would work I'm just throwing ideas out there.

to be honest i was just bored lol

i like where you were going about him doing normal things, coffee shop, barbers, getting groceries lol I might have to do a series