C&C please!

[Miti]

Hi TPF guys! I love this scene and I'd like to hear your critique.

 

[amolitor]

I think the ruins are wonderful. The bridge (?) railing in the foreground is a bit of a cliche, but it's a good cliche.

The trouble here is that you want them to be together in the frame, and that's just not going to work. The ruins are too small in the frame, and the line of the bridge doesn't lead to the ruins, it leads to the hillside behind. Since you're trying to get both in frame together, you wind up picking up a bunch of irrelevant junk, as well. All that stuff on the hillside, the metal.. whatever it is.. framework. The bare trees. As a scene, you like it because you're mentally focusing on the interesting details and ignoring all the crud.

As soon as you shoot it, everything becomes equally important in the frame unless there's something that's making it unimportant (being out of focus, or in shadow, or small, or any of a number of other things can make something unimportant).

I think there are pictures here, but I think you need to get much much closer to the ruins.

Also, the light here isn't very interesting. It's brightly lit, but the shadows are not dramatic or interesting.

 

[ronlane]

Not too bad IMHO. The main thing I see is that it was taken in harsh lighting. Suggestion would be to retake in the early morning or in the evening before dark.

 

[Miti]

Thank you amolitor and rolane. I appreciate the important suggestions you made. Unfortunately I don't have a tele but I would try at least to shoot early in the morning with a better light.