Critique this photo. Too soft?

[photojunky]

This photo is the result of 15 exposures on a single frame. It is kind of interesting but I think I would like it better if it were sharper. I didn’t achieve the results I was looking for. I now have the exposure formula down but haven’t perfected how much to move the camera in-between each exposure. As you can there is a little bit of a ghost effect. (RB67 Pro, 100 ASA film shot at 1600 for 16 exposures)
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[tr0gd0o0r]

very interesting shot. Yeah you do have the exposure formula right. How'd you figure that out btw, trial and error or is there actually a formula? I'd say play w/ movement some more, get it right and see if its sharp. definitly needs to be sharper tho

 

[vonnagy]

interesting technique, but I when i first looked at it I thought it was camera shake.

The shot is well framed but i am just curious - if this shot came out exactly the way you wanted it to, what kind of effect did you want to a accheive? More of ghosting effect as you had mentioned?

Usually i like graveyards in black n white, but the green grass here looks good! Are you going to try more shots here?

 

[photojunky]

Actually I was looking for an effect that would make the image look more like a watercolor painting. It just happens to be a shot that would look better sharp than the type of shot I should have been shooting such as fall leaves or flowers. The exposure was an educated guess/trial and error. I have attempted this before but am determined this time to get it right. More to soon come.

 

[.glib]

It would be interesting to see that shot from two alternating positions that weren't too far appart so you got a very slight ghosting. Might make you feel kinda drunk looking at it?

 

[tr0gd0o0r]

I just took a closer look and had a though. In this photo it looks like there is a walkway or something about halfway up. If its nota walkway there is still a large space b/t the gravestones. Behind this walkway everything looks great. It'd be really neat if you could find a way to keep the front in focus and have that effect in the background. Of course I realize that would be nearly impossible.

 

[ksmattfish]

So what was the proper exposure for the scene if shot normally, and what did you use?

It's early, and I haven't had my coffee yet, but I'm thinking that a good starting point for 16 exposures on a single frame would be to under expose each shot by 4 stops. Each stop cuts the light in half, so four stops would make each exposure 1/16th of the recommended exposure for a single shot. Does this make sense?

 

[photojunky]

If you want 10 shots per frame, expose the film at one/tenth what a proper exposure would be.

Example: If your proper exposure is 60th of a second, then shoot it as close as possible to 600th of a second 10 times. You may have to adjust your aperture slightly to compensate.
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