Eisa

EIngerson · Oct 12, 2014

This is from an impromptu shoot with a 1st timer in Surabaya, Indonesia. C&C always welcome.
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Eisa by Ingerson Photo, on Flickr

Thanks for looking.

Designer · Oct 12, 2014

For impromptu, I suppose these are o.k., my main gripe being the foreground/background and/or your choice of frame spoils them both.

mmaria · Oct 12, 2014

the first thing I thought of is: #2 too saturated

look at her skin color, that small area on her shoulder, greens in the bg

Did she enjoyed while you were shooting her?

glad you're back!

EIngerson · Oct 12, 2014

mmaria said:
the first thing I thought of is: #2 too saturated

look at her skin color, that small area on her shoulder, greens in the bg

Did she enjoyed while you were shooting her?

glad you're back!

Thanks Maria. We both had a great time. Wish I had more than my travel bag to do it though.

e.rose · Oct 12, 2014

1. I hate that bra, and I would have moved the table out of the way (or moved her so the table wasn't in front of her). There's no need for it to be there.

2. Composition in this one is alright, but she looks uncomfortable.

Both of these desperately need more contrast. It looks like you pulled the contrast way down and the saturation way up.

EIngerson · Oct 12, 2014

Thanks for the replies. There was no saturation adjustments at all. Thanks again for looking ERose.

FITBMX · Oct 12, 2014

I agree with e.rose on the bra, with that one shoulder outfit it looks bad. And they kina covered everything else.
Can you set up another shoot with her?

JoeW · Oct 13, 2014

EIngerson said:
This is from an impromptu shoot with a 1st timer in Surabaya, Indonesia. C&C always welcome.
1.
Eisa by Ingerson Photo, on Flickr

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Eisa by Ingerson Photo, on Flickr

Thanks for looking.

Lovely model, nice impromptu shots. Thanks for sharing.

Here are a couple of comments and tips:

1. I like #1 the most. Since her hands are cut off, I'd crop this tighter (make it more of a head-head & shoulders shot). The wrinkle in the front of her top and her bra strap are both distracting. This would have been a good time to have her tighten the fabric (duct tact or a clamp on the clothing). Also, given her spectacular lashes, play around with converting some shots to B&W and then upping the contrast (so it appears more high key--emphasizing her hair and lashes and lips)...I think you'll get some spectacular results.

2. On #2, her right arm needs to be positioned a bit differently. It hides the small/curve of her back (which adds 5 pounds to her). The facial expression seems a bit forced. While generally I like the background, the frond on the left (pointed at her back) is very distracting to me and I'd consider making this a portrait orientation (and thus cropping out most of the left and right background.