Interesting picture and POV.
I think the original is hurt in two ways; the right side line leads the viewer off out of teh frame away from the center; there are two distinct, unrelated centers of interest. It's not that I'm against the extreme wide angle or multiple areas of interest, just the discontinuity of this situation.
Secondly, the fish in the foreground are too bright for my taste; so bright as to be almost unseeable.
I suggest this could be cropped and burned in to make it more coherent and seeable (albeit less interesting)