If you want it blunt, it's simply awful. I can't find even 1 redeeming quality about it. Pose is bad, as stated above it looks like a mug shot. The lighting is way too strong.
I'm not going to pretend I know something I don't; The shot is awkard, stark, and harsh- And I think a very good work. Sometimes life is what it is. At least you have the guts to put something out there that not may fit into the common aesthetic. BTW, I went through some of your other posts to see what I could see- Loved that Holga double exposure.
thanks, abraxas. i wasn't going for the standard portrait photo at all... and i intended for it to be blown out. i wanted it to be more artsy and different than conventionally pretty.
Maybe turning it into a black and white would give a different feel to it? And trying to remove the shadow. It's a different idea, but it doesnt mean its a bad idea. People see things differently.