Lightpainted 4x5

[Berter]

this camera was on display in one of the photo labs at school. light painted it for my final. i like how it turned out. c&c welcome

 

[Trever1t]

mot too sure about the light painting but the exposure and lighting of the subject is very nice!

 

[hrgagan]

Awesome, how did u achieve the lines of light, was it some torch being used to light up the subject at full darkness, like the detail in the image.

 

[Sw1tchFX]

I could totally see this on the new edition on the photography textbook. Yes, THAT BOOK, don't act like you don't know which one it is I'm talking about!

 

[Berter]

Thank you! haha

@ hrgagan yes, i was actually using my phone to expose the subject and the lines were created by me accidentally pointing the light directly at the camera.

 

[GnipGnop]

If you look closely at the picture, your focus is towards the back of the camera. If the lens is the camera's eye, I would choose to focus on the lens. Also, since you're using a long exposure and what looks like a product shot, close your aperture so you get a bit more depth of field. The focus is too shallow.

Your light could be a bit more carefully done as well. Why light the table it's sitting on so brightly? The focus is the camera, not the table. I like how you kept the top dark and the bottom light. That is effective at bringing my eyes from the top to the bottom of the photo, which is a natural path given the camera is at the bottom of the shot. However, the light painting you performed seems haphazard and adds nothing to the composition. A carefully chosen path could work to draw your eyes in a more powerful way towards the camera, or maybe use them to accent some of the features? Give the lens a sparkle on its glass or something.

I think it's a great start though. Keep at it.