Low-Key Dramatic: C&C?

[JackRabbit]

Finally got around to making myself another softbox so this was a combination of messing around with more two light set-ups (this shot is actually only one though, but it uses the new softbox), testing my new lens, and trying to get some more dramatic lighting. Tell me what you think.

Strobist:
Quantaray PZ-1 subject left, shot through softbox, 1/16 power.

 

[crystalhb]

I see what you are going for, but I think the light might be a tad too bright still, or needs to be moved further away... The light on her face is nice but is too much on her elbow. But hey, that's just my 2cents

 

[JackRabbit]

Yeah I agree that the lights was a bit hot on the arm but it didn't look good when the light was more even