New Poem

[Sharkbait]

Dunno if it's any good, but it just popped out of me. I haven't written anything in a long long time, so no idea where this came from. Tell me what you think...

I am constantly reminded of weakness
And of strength

I surround myself with images of accomplishments
Innundating myself with pride
wife
child
parents
awards
grades
happiness
joy
foundation

All that a man could want or need
At home, at work
Strength and Love

But the real reminder of my strength is one I carry
Not a photo
Not a charm
Not a bill in my wallet

...but a scar
on my wrist

 

[terri34 6]

Actually.....it's quite poignant.... :thumbsup:

 

[danalec99]

SPLENDID!!!

I dont know any rules of writing a poem...but the theme is powerful!

 

[Sharkbait]

SPLENDID!!!

I dont know any rules of writing a poem...but the theme is powerful!

There are rules?? :shock: :shock: :shock:

 

[danalec99]

SPLENDID!!!

I dont know any rules of writing a poem...but the theme is powerful!

There are rules?? :shock: :shock: :shock:

You know, stuff like rhyming words and so on ....

the heck with the rules!!

 

[terri34 6]

Rhyming is most certainly not a rule, requirement, or prerequisite to writing a good poem. It's all about the look, the feel, the emotion conveyed. John's reeeeeally good at it.

 

[danalec99]

Rhyming is most certainly not a rule, requirement, or prerequisite to writing a good poem. It's all about the look, the feel, the emotion conveyed. John's reeeeeally good at it.

Yes, everything was simple and normal till the last lines! That was a beautiful roller coaster move!

 

[manda]

Only Shakespeare and his friends should be allowed to rhyme.
It takes great technique, otherwise it just sounds trite.

Or like Dr Suess

I won't ask if this is personal. I feel it that the persona almost is wondering still, which is the weakness.
The last line, yeah...