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IMO, 2 and 3 are just memory shots for family or friends who know and appreciate the children;
#1 is a nice portrait of an sweet and pretty girl with a very natural smile. #1 has much more potential but since her face is totally in the shadow there's not much benefit in b&w because it depends on tonality for much of its impact.
Strangely enough there seems to be a tiny bit of motion blur in this image. Note the small but discernible improvement in sharpness in the right image which has had a bit of shake reduction on it.
I do suggest that you start again with original and bring down the highlights in her hair and increase the brightness in her face to see if you can give the face and the smile more impact.
If you post the original here, I think a lot of people would have a try at it.
Lew
#1 is a nice portrait of an sweet and pretty girl with a very natural smile. #1 has much more potential but since her face is totally in the shadow there's not much benefit in b&w because it depends on tonality for much of its impact.
Strangely enough there seems to be a tiny bit of motion blur in this image. Note the small but discernible improvement in sharpness in the right image which has had a bit of shake reduction on it.
I do suggest that you start again with original and bring down the highlights in her hair and increase the brightness in her face to see if you can give the face and the smile more impact.
If you post the original here, I think a lot of people would have a try at it.
Lew
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Think about how the light is hitting them and which way they're facing. Love the smile in the first one.
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1. Little girl smiling suffers from a fundamental flaw; her direction of gaze leads out of the frame from far to the right of the mid-line of the frame. This causes visual tension which is diametrically opposed to the light, happy feeling you were are trying to show. And as mentioned, there is camera shake visible in the full-sized file. And it's backlighted. And the black bar across the top ruins the simplicity. It's just a poor composition. Bad camera aiming. Period. Great expression, but blurry and composed poorly. There's no way to recover this kind of a mistake after the fact--unless you have an original file with much more space to the right of the girl, then it could be salvaged.
I tried to rescue it by cropping it, but her eyes are so close to the right side of the frame that a normal crop can not fully off-set the tension. I cropped off the black bar at the top, healed a bit in the upper left corner that was still black, and re-worked the exposure in a sepia type look.
As you can see, her eyes are looking right out of the frame, from wayyyyy past the mid-line on the far eye; this is a visual language syntax error. This is an "ain't" in a dissertation type of mistake. As a family snapshot, the moment has been grabbed, yes.
Here it is with an extreme crop, to move the eyes to a more balanced, pleasing position within the frame:
The woman on the ground: clone out that awful telephone pole, and it's still a very weak,unflattering pose. The second shot ,of the girl, is also framed awkwardly. It's a snapshot type of photo that I could not improve in any way by cropping.
I tried to rescue it by cropping it, but her eyes are so close to the right side of the frame that a normal crop can not fully off-set the tension. I cropped off the black bar at the top, healed a bit in the upper left corner that was still black, and re-worked the exposure in a sepia type look.
As you can see, her eyes are looking right out of the frame, from wayyyyy past the mid-line on the far eye; this is a visual language syntax error. This is an "ain't" in a dissertation type of mistake. As a family snapshot, the moment has been grabbed, yes.Here it is with an extreme crop, to move the eyes to a more balanced, pleasing position within the frame:
The woman on the ground: clone out that awful telephone pole, and it's still a very weak,unflattering pose. The second shot ,of the girl, is also framed awkwardly. It's a snapshot type of photo that I could not improve in any way by cropping.
