Siblings C&C welcome

[CorrieMichael]

I went out tonight to capture "siblings" for a contest entry...........before I enter anything you would change or would you go out and shoot again?

 

[camerateur]

So lovely ! I'm really drawn to the white thing above their heads, not sure what it is. Reminds me of a dandelion wafting away?

 

[frommrstomommy]

Yeah.. what are the white specs? This is gorgeous as is but the little bit of a tree or whatever in the top right I'd prob crop out. Submit in like an 8x10 ratio maybe and boom, gone! But you get to keep all of your flare at the top still.

 

[e.rose]

This is absolutely beautiful.

 

[sscarmack]

Yeah.. what are the white specs? This is gorgeous as is but the little bit of a tree or whatever in the top right I'd prob crop out. Submit in like an 8x10 ratio maybe and boom, gone! But you get to keep all of your flare at the top still.

Fairy dust

 

[CorrieMichael]

Yeah.. what are the white specs? This is gorgeous as is but the little bit of a tree or whatever in the top right I'd prob crop out. Submit in like an 8x10 ratio maybe and boom, gone! But you get to keep all of your flare at the top still.

It is like a floating dust brush I made .......... Is it bad? lol

 

[Designer]

Yeah.. what are the white specs? This is gorgeous as is but the little bit of a tree or whatever in the top right I'd prob crop out. Submit in like an 8x10 ratio maybe and boom, gone! But you get to keep all of your flare at the top still.

It is like a floating dust brush I made .......... Is it bad? lol

It's distracting. Leave it out.

Also, if you are considering another attempt, put a shirt on the boy. Now it looks as if he might not be wearing clothes.

 

[tirediron]

VERY nice Corrie! A couple of thoughts: Agree that the boy should have a shirt on, and agree that the 'dust thingy' should go; it's an unncessary distraction. If you do reshoot this (and I think you should) I'd like to see the composition changed ever so slightly. As-is, you have the children almost centred horizontally, which isn't ideal, but I understand why you've done it. I think if you were to turn cart slightly (or move your shooting position in relation to it), you could use the handle/side of the cart as an effective leading line and have a less centred composition.

All of that aside, I think this is an excellent interpretation of the theme with top-notch results, and I wish that I had the imagination to put together a concept like this from a simple word such as 'siblings'.

 

[cynicaster]

If the kids are going to be centered in the frame, I'd personally prefer a square crop.

Really nice photo, though.

 

[TCampbell]

Overall this is a very nice image... but I did want to mention two things:

1) ditch the dust specs

What I immediately noticed is that these are photoshop'd in. True dust/pollens would have some of those specs in focus, but most would be out of focus to varying degrees... they should have blurred, but they don't (you just need some cottonwood trees... the right locations around here can look like it's snowing in june.)

But unless something is entered as a "composite image" (elements exist in the image which were not actually present in real-life) then I give any such a image a huge ding in judgement ... because I immediately wonder "what else" wasn't really there in real-life. If the image is being judged in a category in which adding elements is permitted (many photo contests have strict rules -- at least in some categories -- as to what types of modifications / adjustments are permitted and some will even demand to see the original out-of-the-camera non-processed image.)

2) And this is a nit... but I do wish I would have been able to see the children's eyes. Both of them have their eyelids closed or squinted.

 

[tirediron]

Overall this is a very nice image... but I did want to mention two things:

1) ditch the dust specs

What I immediately noticed is that these are photoshop'd in. True dust/pollens would have some of those specs in focus, but most would be out of focus to varying degrees... they should have blurred, but they don't (you just need some cottonwood trees... the right locations around here can look like it's snowing in june.)

But unless something is entered as a "composite image" (elements exist in the image which were not actually present in real-life) then I give any such a image a huge ding in judgement ... because I immediately wonder "what else" wasn't really there in real-life. If the image is being judged in a category in which adding elements is permitted (many photo contests have strict rules -- at least in some categories -- as to what types of modifications / adjustments are permitted and some will even demand to see the original out-of-the-camera non-processed image.)

Really excellent points Tim, especially the note about the composite aspect; that never even occurred to me!

2) And this is a nit... but I do wish I would have been able to see the children's eyes. Both of them have their eyelids closed or squinted.

Interesting; as soon as I read this, I went back and spent about five minutes looking at the image, and I don't see it (pun fully intended). I think the way the eyes are captured now adds a quiet intimacy to the image which would be lost if it were changed.

 

[AggieBecky]

I like this picture, it's really beautiful. I really don't like the white specks though. They are the very first thing I noticed about the picture and instead of focusing on the beautiful children/picture my mind went "What is that?" which is probably not the first thought you want coming to mind when someone sees your work.

 

[e.rose]

All the critique you're getting on the styling of this image, is exactly the reason I ditched the forum for almost a year to "go find and develop myself", photographically speaking.

Technically... it's beautiful. The crop doesn't bother me, although if I were to crop it, I'd actually pull it in more from the left than the right.

Stylistically... it's ethereal.

If you change anything, I might cry.

This photo literally makes me want to start photographing children... And I can't stand to be around most kids for long periods of time. But images like this inspire me to want to make images like this.

I realize I'm in the minority (as in, I think literally everyone here disagrees with me on your image, but that's just how I feel about it. )

 

[DarkShadow]

Other then the specks this is a beauty,love the lighting.The Shirt suggestion is a good idea but I can see his jeans but at first glance he does look naked.Nice work.

 

[e.rose]

Corrie, do you have a website?