Samples from my recent wedding:
Was this the first kiss or a posed shot? If it was a posed shot.. you really didnt pick the best background (column sticking out of his head).
Best shot you got here. Pretty tight though. I mean if you frame this, the dress and the bouquet will get cut off.
Not wide enough. Not sure how bright the sparkles are but a lot of people dont use flash with this scenario and turn out great. Kinda like this from a quick google search :
http://luciaisabellablog.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/08/Angie-Bill-Wedding-Preview.jpg
Not feeling it.
You need to get closer to the ring. Right now the flowers get the attention and the flowers look soft.
too tight. Too much ambient for dragging the shutter.
C&C welcome!