In Black and White

Discussion in 'Critique Forum Archives' started by mad_malteaser, Feb 17, 2005.

  1. mad_malteaser

    mad_malteaser TPF Noob!

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    This is the photo I submitted for the competition in January. To be perfectly honest, I wasn't all that happy with it myself, I had a semblance of an idea but don't think I got it across very well.

    Please be brutal... tell me where I could have gone with this.

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    Cool idea, but the fold line and the curvature that causes it not to quite work for me.

    On a side note, is that copyright infringment? :)
     
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    I like the idea also. However, what part of the paper is the subject? Or is it just a shot of a newspaper, any newspaper? Is there a message? It needs something else to me. I dont know, coffee, a donut, a gun. j/k

    The right upper corner I dont really like either. (the triangle of white space)

    I do like the angle though.

    Cool idea. To me, just needs something else.
     
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    yeah the top left corner seems to be too "empty"
     
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    I don't know, but it the shot just seems a little cliché to me. Maybe It's just because I saw it in the voting for the competition, but it feels to me like I've seen this kind of shot elewhere before. But that said, I think it's done quite nicely. The exposure is excellent, and I personally like the angle. Though it might have been better with a more defined focal point, like maybe a whole word to read in the headline. Especially if it conveyed some kind of message that related to something else in the shot, like the image. Other than that, I like it.
     
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    Maybe a lower angle and capture a larger piece of a headline or photo and shot with alot of DOF to create a subject out of a piece of the newspaper. Love the Idea though for black and white.
     
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    Thanks everyone for your comments. I think I'm going to try this again a little later on.

    KevinR: Good point there about copyright, I'm not sure myself. I wonder if anyone else here has any thoughts on that?
     

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