looking to improve

Discussion in 'Critique Forum Archives' started by nomav6, Nov 5, 2004.

  1. nomav6

    nomav6 TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Oct 14, 2004
    Messages:
    253
    Likes Received:
    0
    please tell me what you think of these pics to help me improve, these where also posted on other pages within the forum, but Im looking for tips on how to become a better photographer which is why Im now posting them here, thanks
    [​IMG]
    [​IMG]
     
  2. MDowdey

    MDowdey Guest

    i like your use of lines in the first one...

    do you have photoshop? i would increase contrast, and throw a little sharpening filter on that bad boy..


    md
     
  3. Trig

    Trig TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Oct 27, 2004
    Messages:
    221
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    Milton Keynes, U.K.
    They are both great. I agree with the contrast on the top one. The kitten one is cute but menacing haha.
     
  4. mygrain

    mygrain Friend to nose goblins everywhere

    Joined:
    Aug 11, 2004
    Messages:
    3,660
    Likes Received:
    25
    Location:
    in a cool dry place
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos NOT OK to edit
    These are pretty good. The first I almost lose the compostion because the angle of the shot. I would possible go back and take a few with less a straight on shot and angle it a bit to get more of the trains cars. Yeah the contrast seems to be off a bit. If ya don't have PS then you can get Vic Man's Photo Editor for free here...http://vicman.net/vcwphoto/

    Its a very simple program but you can tweek hue, saturation, and contrast and many other things as well.
     
  5. JonMikal

    JonMikal TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Jul 28, 2004
    Messages:
    12,262
    Likes Received:
    327
    I like the top one best and will fourth the contrast suggestion. I may even be inclined to crop the first support out. It would be better if it was all there or not at all. GREAT WORK!!!
     
  6. pilgrim

    pilgrim TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Dec 8, 2003
    Messages:
    806
    Likes Received:
    2
    Location:
    Victoria BC Canada
    am i the only one who thinks the cat picture is just AWESOME!!?
    it looks soooo evil, i love it! :p
     
  7. photogoddess

    photogoddess TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Feb 29, 2004
    Messages:
    6,253
    Likes Received:
    34
    Location:
    Lala Land
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos NOT OK to edit
    I love the first one but I agree with Matt about the contrast and sharpening needing a boost. Also, I would love to see a similar shot with the camera up just a smidge. Love the kitty too - menacing little bugger. :p
     
  8. nomav6

    nomav6 TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Oct 14, 2004
    Messages:
    253
    Likes Received:
    0
    First I would like to thank you for the kind words and the suggestions, with that said I do have photoshop and The GIMP I'll play with it some and will update this with it, its not hard for me to go back to the train its in the same town that I go to college at, so I'll go there and see how much I can get in and play with the angles some, I have some more pics of the train but that was my favorite one, and as for the cat I have another one that is not so "evil" and I thought about putting them both in photoshop and putting a rollover on it.
     
  9. motcon

    motcon TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Jul 18, 2003
    Messages:
    1,410
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    usa. soon to be a euro boy.
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos OK to edit
    if it offends you that i marked up your images, do let me know and i will promptly delete them.

    - it appears that you have diverging verticals. the two red lines are of equal length in the image below. the divergence causes a bit of tension. while tension in a composition is good, this tends toward skewing and imbalance. if my eyes serve me correctly, the supporting beams on the left are indeed leaning to the left in their natural state. with that in mind, you may want to try cropping out the (i'm not sure what it is) vertical on the right of the frame. anchoring a shot like this with a foreground object is a good thing to do, so i'd leave the beam on the left right where it is.

    - as my eyes travel down the path of the photo, it seems to lose dof. at what aperture did you shoot this?

    - as noted, the shadows could be printed down a bit harder for more contrast.

    - what are you trying to communicate with this shot? i do love the abstraction of the lines and the long swath of white captures my eye.

    [​IMG]

    the cat photo: love it. just love it. have you considered a square cropping of it to get rid of the space on the left and bring more focus to center?

    [​IMG]

    good eye...keep shooting.


    *edit: i'm a film shooter, not a photo-chopper, but here is a crop and some adjusted shadows.
    [​IMG]
     
  10. Karalee

    Karalee hOtLiPs!

    Joined:
    Feb 22, 2004
    Messages:
    3,849
    Likes Received:
    46
    Location:
    Here....there....everywhere
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos NOT OK to edit
    whoa, that was one of the best (and most helpful) critiques Ive ever seen.
     
  11. hobbes28

    hobbes28 Incredible Supporting Member

    Joined:
    Jul 10, 2004
    Messages:
    4,807
    Likes Received:
    41
    Location:
    at work...
    I'm with you on that. We need an emoticon with a dropped jaw. :D

    I really like your pictures here. Your DOF is really good on both of them so you focus on the parts that you want to be seen. The best way to learn, IMO, is by posting what you like/don't like and looking for ways to make them better. Keep it up!
     
  12. Trig

    Trig TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Oct 27, 2004
    Messages:
    221
    Likes Received:
    0
    Location:
    Milton Keynes, U.K.
    No you aren't, I love this pic more and more every time I see it. I want it framed... not the kitten, the pic... :D
     

Share This Page