I really like the lighting on the kids... clean and soft, which suits the subject matter. I would just watch the background a little more next time. The bright spots in the background take the focus away from the subject. It isn't a huge distraction in this case, but it is something to keep in mind for the future.
I will definitely go back in and tone those areas down. I wanted to try and leave a "natural" vibe in it.
I really appreciate the compliment on the lighting... It was my first time using outdoor fill light from an OTC flash! I studied hard the days before and I was so nervous I did not do a great job!
Thank you for your input!