Another Composite...need some feedback

lennon33x · Feb 16, 2014

Ok ladies and gents...

So I've been (intermittently)working on a series of photographs that depict how much easier my life would be if I were a Jedi. I started out with pouring coffee, then putting away dishes, and now bath time with my girls. I'm generally pleased with the image, but I feel like it's missing that "wow" factor. Granted, this is not an easy task to accomplish seeing as I have to get the scene set up, light appropriately, and then have two 22 month old girls who decide that bath time is time to wreck everything in the bathroom and be ridiculously uncooperative. Nonetheless, they didn't take the image. I'm just looking to see what I can do to improve it.

mmaria · Feb 17, 2014

ok, jmho

at first sight it's not clear enough what did you do to make this a composite. I've seen the shampoo first.

What's that, next to your right hand? it looks like your third oof hand

water from the pitcher is going to the frame with the skull on the window, not in the bath tub. That frame shouldn't be there if you're photographing some fun time with children.

it's not clear whatthat towel is doing

lennon33x · Feb 17, 2014

mmaria said:
ok, jmho at first sight it's not clear enough what did you do to make this a composite. I've seen the shampoo first. What's that, next to your right hand? it looks like your third oof hand water from the pitcher is going to the frame with the skull on the window, not in the bath tub. That frame shouldn't be there if you're photographing some fun time with children. it's not clear whatthat towel is doing

The "skull" is a sketch of Darth Vader. It's a recurring prop in all of the images. Are you saying it's distracting? Like it should be more inconspicuous?

I do see what you're talking about with my hand. I reordered one is the layers. I just need to reblend it

mmaria · Feb 17, 2014

about Darth Wader

I just thought that you're photographing children having fun, playing and that it will suit more to the scene if you have some happy fun sketch instead of that one

lennon33x · Feb 17, 2014

mmaria said:
about Darth Wader I just thought that you're photographing children having fun, playing and that it will suit more to the scene if you have some happy fun sketch instead of that one

Well because the image has a theme, along with the other images, I didn't want to stray too far from it. The image might have made some more sense had I shown all of them.

Rick58 · Feb 17, 2014

"pouring coffee" isn't working. It's clear liquid from a plastic pitcher. Until I read your description, I thought it was meant to be pouring water on your kids playing in the tub.