cool, looks like you got your link issue sorted out..
#1 im wondering if it would be better if you did selective coloring on the lollipop. it would have been better if her right eye wasn't in the shadow, but this is still a decent portrait.
#2 horizon slightly off, but scenery looks wonderful. how high up was this?

Not really. Just looking for substantive comments and generalities such as "composition" and "lighting" are useless. I don't think any of us would disagree that the photo would look better without the shadows across her right eye, so telling me that "lighting" is an issue is a huge "no ****" moment to me.