Beginner's Critique - Pass it on

Bifurcator · Jul 20, 2008

icassell said:
Yes, I like that better.

I was trying to pull a fast one actually. It's all computer generated.

No cameras involved at all.

It's only medium grade CG at that. I spent about 25 minutes building the model and another 5 setting up the lights, scene, and rendering it. I wanted to see if anyone would notice it was CG.

bullitt453 · Jul 20, 2008

Bifurcator said:
I was trying to pull a fast one actually. It's all computer generated.

No cameras involved at all.

It's only medium grade CG at that. I spent about 25 minutes building the model and another 5 setting up the lights, scene, and rendering it. I wanted to see if anyone would notice it was CG.

Sneaky, sneaky. lol. Now that I look at it, I can tell that it's CG.

Wonder if I could get away with that. This is all CG as well. Not going to post it directly in the thread so that we stay on focus. lol
http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs8/i/2005/322/9/8/Goodbye_by_4fit.jpg

Pugs · Jul 20, 2008

bullitt453 said:
Ah, that is Epcot, isn't it. Didn't even notice that at first. I have a similar shot as well, except in day time. lol.

This is a wonderful thread concept! Very cool!

I like this photo from a color and composition point of view (I guess, like so many others, I'm very much newbie here). It just doesn't really do much for me from a subject point of view. It looks nice, but didn't really hold my attention. I'm not sure why.

So, here's mine... (I've got a thick skin so give it both barrels!):

Bifurcator · Jul 20, 2008

bullitt453 said:
Sneaky, sneaky. lol. Now that I look at it, I can tell that it's CG.

Wonder if I could get away with that. This is all CG as well. Not going to post it directly in the thread so that we stay on focus. lol
http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs8/i/2005/322/9/8/Goodbye_by_4fit.jpg

Is that Bryce? Yeah, you could get away with it.

bullitt453 · Jul 21, 2008

Bifurcator said:
Is that Bryce? Yeah, you could get away with it.

Actually old Terragen. You can see quite a few more at my dA gallery.

bullitt453 · Jul 21, 2008

@Pugs
I was really just posting that image as a reference to one posted by another user with the same structure in it. lol

That black & white image you posted it very nice. The composition is good. Jut wish there was a little more detail/depth in the sky.

Resin42 · Jul 21, 2008

Not sure about whatever effect you've used to get the grainyness but it looks a bit linear, if this is intentional fair enough. Other than that it's a really interesting photo and good mono conversion.

Keeping the mono theme going.

bullitt453 · Jul 21, 2008

@Resin

Yes, I was going for a very grainy, scanned type of look. Thanks for the C&C.

Your picture of the abandoned boat has a very nice composition. It just seems a tad flat to me. Not enough contrast or something. Can't exactly pinpoint what it is though.

I posted this one on the previous page, but it got skipped over. lol.

PackingMyBags · Jul 21, 2008

Love the sharp contrast and your focus on the tinged chrome. I might open up my F stop a little to get more range of focus. Oh and i see you in the chrome pipes

Good pic though.

Chris of Arabia · Jul 21, 2008

Think you need to decide what your subject matter is: people, waterfall or the great chasm above. Currently the photo isn't serving any of them well. There's something odd about the focus too, but can't quite work out what.

Resin42 · Jul 21, 2008

That's a really interesting piece of architecture to shoot, I'm just not sure why you hid behind a tree to do it. :lol:

It's a cool pic but I'd just rather see more of the structure.

NikonNyc · Jul 21, 2008

Very great shot, slightly off focus and I personally would have slowed down the shutter speed to create a bit more definition on the spines but good shot overall!

Well here is what I have to offer today took my nephew to NYC planetarium.
My nephew ( the little boy who left me behind so I could take the shot.)

Please some suggestions are really wanted....

Donald Harvey · Jul 21, 2008

First off I am a beginner photographer, just started out about 2 weeks ago, but I'll give my two cents on the little that I know.

Nice job with the photo, my favorite aspect about it is the Large object compared to the small boy. Kinda shows how big the world really is!

However, I think you might want to try to get some more color added to it. Looks like a sad picture, very cold colors, and a young boy all alone. If that is what you are trying to accomplish, then nice job!

Have a go at mine! I took this at the sunset in Springfield Missouri on top of a parking garage. Rip it apart please!!

pulse · Jul 21, 2008

Well i am a beginner myself so ill try my best!
1) Half of the photo looks underexposed, you cant see barely any detail of the buildings or the ground
2) seems pretty blurry to me so im thinking that there could be camera shake since there was probly a longer shutter time
3) Although im kinda liking the colour of the sky it seems alittle hazey/ polluted and theres a bit of noise in the sky
4) Instead of the tower bieng straight in the middle using the rule of thirds would have made the composition better
Overall nice job on the photo, but a few things to work on next time. And sorry if im wrong i probly dont have a clue what im talking about haha.

Anyway heres mine, i went alittle crazy on the effects but i was going for something unique!

rocktronx · Jul 22, 2008

I think the sepia tone was a good choice for this image. The sky has a nice gradation but my eyes keep landing on the rails either to the left or the right of the tree. a shalow depth of field may have brought the tree in to focus wile bluring out the fence and house to keep the focal point on the tree. Over all it's a good shot. I'd like to see some more.

Heres one taken with a kodak Z812 point and shoot. Critique hard. I want to learn.

Lest try this again ... with the photo