Carol

[tmurphy0828]

Hey everybody! I recently had a volunteer model in my photography class and we did a bit of a photoshoot around the campus. Just looking for some feedback. These are just a few out of the set. It was a little hard to get the exact shots I wanted since there was about 20-25 of us all trying to shoot photos of the same model at the same time.

#1


#2


#3


#4


#5


#6

 

[amolitor]

The vignette is a bit much, to my eye.

#1 and #6 lose the model against the black doorway. Her hair fades to black and vanishes, more or less.

#2 is an almost. The vignette, the lines from her underclothing, and the clipped umbrella conspire to make this feel like a miss, though.

#3 is quite wonderful, by far my favorite. Clean, simple, but not bland. Nice balance.

#4 is lovely. The background seems excessively simple somehow, also tilted. I'm not quite loving it, for reasons I do not really understand.

#5 is almost excellent, the background is a little chaotic and too close to in-focus to my taste. The framing and posing is spot on, though.

 

[Braineack]

#3!!!!!!

#4 and #5 are great as well, but have some flaws that don't quite do it for me as in #3.


#1, 2 and 6 should be tossed IMHO.

 

[tmurphy0828]

The vignette is a bit much, to my eye.

#1 and #6 lose the model against the black doorway. Her hair fades to black and vanishes, more or less.

#2 is an almost. The vignette, the lines from her underclothing, and the clipped umbrella conspire to make this feel like a miss, though.

#3 is quite wonderful, by far my favorite. Clean, simple, but not bland. Nice balance.

#4 is lovely. The background seems excessively simple somehow, also tilted. I'm not quite loving it, for reasons I do not really understand.

#5 is almost excellent, the background is a little chaotic and too close to in-focus to my taste. The framing and posing is spot on, though.

Thanks for the feedback! in #1 and #6 there is a very busy background with lots of signs and a big ugly elevator door so I tried to hide it by darkening the background and using the vignette. I tried to get a better position where that wouldn't be in the photo but like I said there was about 20 of us fighting for position haha.

You mentioned too much vignette in all the photos and I just went back into lightroom and realized I accidentally coppied the vignette I tried to use in #1 and #6 to the whole set -__- oops

Thank you though you pointed some things out I didn't even notice

 

[tmurphy0828]

#3!!!!!!

#4 and #5 are great as well, but have some flaws that don't quite do it for me as in #3.


#1, 2 and 6 should be tossed IMHO.

Thanks for the feedback!

 

[amolitor]

In #6 at least you could probably help out by, gently, bringing out her hair more. You have a weak rimlight going on there already, just emphasize that, and I think you'll find that you like the picture better.

 

[Braineack]

It can't fix the face she's making, especially after seeing what she looks like smiling...

 

[The_Traveler]

In virtually all of these her face is darker than her arms so my eyes go to her arms and dress.

 

[tmurphy0828]

In #6 at least you could probably help out by, gently, bringing out her hair more. You have a weak rimlight going on there already, just emphasize that, and I think you'll find that you like the picture better.

Ill try that and see how I like it

It can't fix the face she's making, especially after seeing what she looks like smiling...

In which one #6?

In virtually all of these her face is darker than her arms so my eyes go to her arms and dress.

hmm I hadnt noticed that. Maybe I can try to brush a bit of exposure on her face to lighten it up a bit?

 

[vintagesnaps]

I agree - #3!! the umbrella frames her beautifully especially in red against the white, nice balance in the composition. Looks like her face is a little more shaded under the umbrella than her arms in some of these, but you got some nice sharp images.

Looks like #4 needs to be straightened (that the camera wasn't quite straight when framing the shot - look at the doorway and cement block pattern of the wall), and #6 is crooked as a dog's hind leg - a tilt can sometimes work but this to me doesn't look like it was intentional (if it was for me it doesn't work).

In photos like #4 when there's vignetting I usually wonder why is that extra space in the photo? do you need it? Or would it be better cropped?

In #5 she looks great except a couple of strands of hair that needed to be rearranged before taking the picture (one across her chin and one that seems to cross her chest and was caught on the umbrella); and that upper left corner seems a little distracting with that corner of the roof and window. I've done events and if you are working around people and can't move much, you can often lean... I've done that plenty, or scrunched down, or whatever I can try to do to get something either in view the way I want it or out of my viewfinder before I release the shutter. It can be challenging when you're working around others or not able to move around and change your vantage point as much as you'd like.

 

[Derrel]

These all seem artificially smoothed and look "fakey" to me. Did you apply a generous amount of noise reduction? It looks like that's what was done, and it's really made the skin look plastic, and the real-woreld item in the photos look odd, like the railing in #2. A couple frames, numbers 1 and 6, seem to have been corrected and pushed a bit too far, and the resulting pictures look a bit wonky. I guess what these seem to lack is realism...they just look too, well "plastic" for my taste.

 

[tmurphy0828]

I agree - #3!! the umbrella frames her beautifully especially in red against the white, nice balance in the composition. Looks like her face is a little more shaded under the umbrella than her arms in some of these, but you got some nice sharp images.

Looks like #4 needs to be straightened (that the camera wasn't quite straight when framing the shot - look at the doorway and cement block pattern of the wall), and #6 is crooked as a dog's hind leg - a tilt can sometimes work but this to me doesn't look like it was intentional (if it was for me it doesn't work).

In photos like #4 when there's vignetting I usually wonder why is that extra space in the photo? do you need it? Or would it be better cropped?

In #5 she looks great except a couple of strands of hair that needed to be rearranged before taking the picture (one across her chin and one that seems to cross her chest and was caught on the umbrella); and that upper left corner seems a little distracting with that corner of the roof and window. I've done events and if you are working around people and can't move much, you can often lean... I've done that plenty, or scrunched down, or whatever I can try to do to get something either in view the way I want it or out of my viewfinder before I release the shutter. It can be challenging when you're working around others or not able to move around and change your vantage point as much as you'd like.

Thanks for the feedback ill try to keep all that in mind. It seems I need to be more careful with keeping the camera straight and straightening shots in post.

These all seem artificially smoothed and look "fakey" to me. Did you apply a generous amount of noise reduction? It looks like that's what was done, and it's really made the skin look plastic, and the real-woreld item in the photos look odd, like the railing in #2. A couple frames, numbers 1 and 6, seem to have been corrected and pushed a bit too far, and the resulting pictures look a bit wonky. I guess what these seem to lack is realism...they just look too, well "plastic" for my taste.

I did not do that much noise reduction but I did soften her skin a bit to try and smooth out her skin tone. Maybe I smoothed it out a bit to much?

 

[Derrel]

>SNIP>I did not do that much noise reduction but I did soften her skin a bit to try and smooth out her skin tone. Maybe I smoothed it out a bit to much?

Yes, I think a bit too much skin smoothing has been applied to these. I think a better use of your post processing effort would be to take the clone tool and with about a 25-pixel wide, soft-edged brush set to about 85% opacity at 18% flow, just "daub on" a little bit of Photoshop Makeup on her under-eye circles. Not enough to totally eliminate the under-eye lines that she has in reality,. but enough to lighten up the dark shadows that are really accentuating the under-eye lines she has.

 

[runnah]

1, 2, & 6 are all terribly unflattering facial expressions.