Sweet_a, I like your edition!
Heip's edition of the eyes make them look creepy, to my mind. I think it's taking things too far there.
But I like what you did to the photo, the new crop (even tighter!) is better, her eyes show more detail, and eyes and lips are no longer so much in contrast to her bright, shadowless (not quite at first, but you know...) skin - only do her teeth look quite grey now and she has a bluish corner of her mouth. You might want to work a little further on that, too? But in your edition I feel the idea of "high key" is now better represented than in the first version of the photo.