For what it's worth, I really like these. I like the second one better because it's got more of a focal point. The first one I'm not really sure what to look at and the shallow DOF is a bit confusing for the eye.
I really like the subject and I like your exposure and pp. But. the big but, for me you have too much OOF background, which is distracting. A tighter crop, either in camera or in post I think would enhance the image.