Allenc873; there's quite a lot going on here, so it's rather difficult to simply "pick one".
The color version "reads" better, but that might be a stretch; saying that it "reads" better, when IMO it doesn't quite do what I presume you intended.
I think you were trying to mimic the light of a candle flame illuminating the girl, but it just doesn't fill the bill.
Since you didn't specifically ask for C&C, I'll skip it for now.
Besides; I don't want to come off as seeming "harsh".
what would you have done differently ?