Help with movie poster composition

[Raddy]

I'm making some fake movie posters to hang up around my apartment, and I'm a little torn on how I want to work this one. Here's my first pass at it:

I'm not 100% sold on the monochromatic pseudo-Reservoir Dogs look yet. I was thinking that high-contrast, desaturated version could work as well. Here's what the untouched color version of me looks like:

And I also have versions with the tie tied, walking away, sitting down, but I really think I like this pose the best.

I'm also open to suggestions for the text placement (I'll fill in the credits later), addition of a background, font selection, etc. Let me know what you guys think!

 

[407370]

I think it needs a visual connection with the title. In keeping with the stark bareness how about:

 

[weepete]

I like the original though I'd prefer a bit more detail on your left hand side. Otherwise it kinda makes you look like two face.

I also think a bit of colour would be spot on. I'd like to see how it works with the above and keeping the red in the tie.

I'm thinking more like Sin City

 

[Raddy]

Something like this?

407370, it's an interesting idea, but the picture is rough and kind of jagged, I feel like having a coil drawn in that's sharp and crisp is kind of a mismatch. That might just be me though.

Thanks for the feedback!