Jelena

[Oxytocinbite]

There we go,

 

[cgipson1]

There we go,

This one I like.. it is a little too bright on her right cheek (too much contrast right and left)... but not bad. This is a nice example of how a horizontal portrait can work. That one strand of hair across her left eye is both annoying and endearing at the same time.

The rest? Several have blown highlights on the legs, arms, etc. Others, the subject is just too small in the frame. The B&W is ok, but the blown out background kills it for me (it is also off balance).

 

[tirediron]

Assuming you've posted for C&C, there are way too many for which to give detailed feedback, however a few general thoughts. Overall, lighting, exposure and focus are good. Remember that bras are UNDERwear, watch your backgrounds; look for scenes that are even, homogenous and free of distracting elements such as the trees, patch and bucket in #1, avoid cropping limbs along their axis (forearm in the one below the headshot).

 

[amolitor]

She's a charming model, but far too many of these pictures have her slumping over herself, accentuating her tummy, which simply ain't flattering. You have to be absurdly thin for that to not make you look sort of bloppy.

 

[Oxytocinbite]

She's a charming model, but far too many of these pictures have her slumping over herself, accentuating her tummy, which simply ain't flattering. You have to be absurdly thin for that to not make you look sort of bloppy.

She isn't exactly slumping, that is how her body is and I don't believe every model has to be stick thin. She is happy with the way she looks. I would rather have you judge the photo's and not the way the model looks. Thank you very much.

 

[cgipson1]

She's a charming model, but far too many of these pictures have her slumping over herself, accentuating her tummy, which simply ain't flattering. You have to be absurdly thin for that to not make you look sort of bloppy.

She isn't exactly slumping, that is how her body is and I don't believe every model has to be stick thin. She is happy with the way she looks. I would rather have you judge the photo's and not the way the model looks. Thank you very much.

I think she is lovely as is! But the lighting and posing / composition needs some work...

 

[amolitor]

I agree that she looks fine. But she's slouching, and nobody looks very good slouching.

 

[tirediron]

I would rather have you judge the photo's and not the way the model looks. Thank you very much.

Lighten up Francis! Andrew wasn't judging her physique, he was commenting on her posing. It's a simple matter of physiology; almost everyone unless they are unnaturally thin will give the impression of having a paunch when posed like this. As the photographer, these are the sorts of details that you need to 'train' your eye to see. Bear in mind too that in portraiture, the image is about the person, so the appearance and posing of the model is very relevant critique!

 

[Oxytocinbite]

Well I do understand that the posing in the photo of her sitting on the fence is a bit more slumping, which I should of fixed. I am still a beginner and I appreciate all the comments. Some of the areas were more blown out which I think I can fix up with editing. Although I do think brightness plays a factor in what the photographer prefers as a preference.

 

[cgipson1]

Although I do think brightness plays a factor in what the photographer prefers as a preference.

Within limits, yes... but when it is glaringly overexposed, it draws the viewers eye away from the subject. Our eyes always seek out the lightest, brightest area in an image... just the way we work. I strongly suspect you do not work on a calibrated monitor... so what is glaringly obvious to us, you may not see... if your monitor brightness is off.

 

[YvetteC]

The model looks really young to me...which makes the shoes and some of the posing feel too adult...and the conflict between girl and woman ends up making her look awkward. I could totally WEAR those shoes out for dinner and drinks...nice pair of jeans, cute top etc...but in these pics, those shoes are wearing her. #4 is the direction you should go with her. It's very sweet and honest.

 

[cgipson1]

The model looks really young to me...which makes the shoes and some of the posing feel too adult...and the conflict between girl and woman ends up making her look awkward. I could totally WEAR those shoes out for dinner and drinks...nice pair of jeans, cute top etc...but in these pics, those shoes are wearing her. #4 is the direction you should go with her. It's very sweet and honest.

Total agreement!

 

[ktan7]

Good portraiture. Nicely done!