If the framing distracts me as a viewer from the subject (either the abstract or the objective), then I consider that a problem with the image. You say you're open to criticism, but if this is something you cannot accept then what is there to critique?
I do not crique the subject or the circumstances, because this is not what the photographer is responsible for. I critique the captured image, of which the moment is only one element. I also don't believe in superlatives in aesthetics. My philosophy is that everything has equal importance, from the technical, to the aesthetic to the conceptual - all has equal importance.
So sure, here you captured a moment, but the way it was captured distracts me from that moment. It's a flaw, and I offered criticism on that flaw. You can agree with me or not, but you cannot deny me of what I'm seeing here.
As a side note that is totally unrelated, she actually used a 4x5 SLR, a Graflex RB Series D by the looks of it. I've owned and used an RB Series B as well as a view camera. These cameras are actually pretty fast to use, and a lot of fun, one of my favorite systems. It's not a view camera, however, and the experience is very different.