I think it's a pretty cool shot. I think you're in a little too close though, maybe a wider angle could have helped to give more context. As it was, I had to look at it for a while to know that I was looking at a bed and a mirrored closet door..
I think a lot was lost in the black and white conversion. If you could have colorized the fog in photoshop to be red or something - while leaving the rest of the scene colorized, maybe a tiny bit desaturated - I think it would have fit your title a bit better.
Just my 2 cents. Looks like you put some work into it though and it's a cool idea.. I'd take the time to reshoot
Kind of the same kind of comment. The room is a little on the bright side and seeing it in the mirror is a bit confusing. It would be cool to break up the light so it comes out in rays... like the smoke is so dense it can only penetrate in a few parts.