It's so awesome, but... I would either crop at his waist or keep in mind to get lower and get the whole body. The half black image isn't working for me.
I like the photo in first post. Seems more balanced to me.
If I were to crop it, I would remove 2 cm on the left keeping the space on the right of the photographer.
It would be easy to you to remove the grain.
A little bit more of saturation would also be welcome .