Portrait of my dad C&C and a Question.

[HWesh]

Lighting Setup:

Canon 380EX at full power
Yongnuo YN560 at 1/4, +2, zoom 80mm through a shoot-through

Question:
I was wondering if $150 too much to charge my high school's athletic department for a 16x20 print.

 

[tirediron]

Move your fill(?) (the one camera left) light to something closer to 90deg to the subject and drop it down a stop or two.

No, not if they will pay that much.

 

[Raian-san]

Yes if they paid for that picture.

 

[Derrel]

Needs brighter light on his face! His face is severely underexposed, and the separation/edge light coming in from the back is 2 stops too bright for the current main light brightness. That umbrella is riding awfully low in relation to his standing position; I'd suggest raising the umbrella and doubling its power (or more).

 

[GeneralBenson]

Derail is spot on. Umbrella need to be higher, and quite a bit more powerful. Or if you want a low key sorta thing, the rim light need to back off. But right now the ratio just feels way to big. Also, does he have a lazy eye, or did you catch him at a weird moment?