After reading the whole thing I've had quite a good laugh!
The grammar pics are hilarious. Where on earth did Tharm find that picture of Colonel Klink? I absolutely loved that show growing up (granted, it was on TV Land and had been in syndication for twenty years, but still classic). And "Stop, Grammer Time" is now my Facebook status...
To the OP, it's not a bad first effort. If it were me (the C&C here) I would have P-Shoped out the stray hairs so that you wouldn't have to worry about coloring them. It also ups the image quality just a bit. Also the tiny imperfections going along the edges of her face and shoulders are noticeable, but you already know the slightly more time consuming method to take care of that.

As for the shot itself, she's a beautiful girl and I like the effect you got with the lens at that distance. I would assume that it was intentional. Not something that you would go with for portraits all the time, but a neat twist for a photograph for you and her to enjoy.