Sorry to be the odd one out and hating on this

well ok not hating. The lighting is good, the poses are natural, technically they're fine. I'm just so very tired of seeing these dime-a-dozen at night rain (or hose) shots! I'm not talking about this forum, by the way, I mean this has been over done by strobist, chase jarvis, zack arias, joe mcnally, so many pros and semi pros have done this to death! Having said that I understand why you would want to recreate this style, regardless on if you were planning on doing this with the rain or not.
I also feel what adds to the dissatisfaction to me is that this is a job well done, and I'd like to see it done better. I feel the clothing and style of the model doesn't match the visible ground (which when you consider how much of the photo is negative space, where they are standing should be an important decision.) Also the color of the ground contrasts the model in a negative way.
Take this all with a grain of salt obviously, as I tend to be harsher on those that do a better job than those that don't. I just understand how hard you worked on these and would like to see you get something out of it other than "job well done!"