Snow and light: C&C please

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Hello all -- the story is simple: I snowshoed around a bend in our University trails, and there was this combination of snow and light streaming over a bank.

General C&C is welcome -- I'm considering using this as a portfolio piece, so feel free to be hard on it. A specific question: Are the lit branches in the background distracting? I'm imagining trouble with trying to clone them out, so what could I do?

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I'm bumping this in hopes of critiques. Is the photo "meh" enough that nobody wants to say anything after a day?
 

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Hi, was not sure at first. Found it hard to make out what was going on. Have you tried flipping it horizontally? I think you will find it will flow better from left to right. Just a thought.
 

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Are the lit branches in the background distracting?
Yes, and it would be a tough crop to get rid of the black bar towards the top, it really throws the image off, can you re-shoot?
 
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Yes, and it would be a tough crop to get rid of the black bar towards the top, it really throws the image off, can you re-shoot?

Hm, unfortunately a reshoot is unlikely -- unless we get a windy, sunny day when I can get outside at the right time. I can definitely tone down the most distracting branch in the background and flip it horizontally -- we'll see how that looks.
 
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Here is a slightly changed version: flipped, and the most distracting shiny branches have been toned down. The big black trees are just about impossible though...

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I feel that works better and cloning out the branch makes the trunks of the trees become a part of the image with a glimpse of blue sky. I like it.
 
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Thanks both. I wouldn't have thought to flip the image -- do you suppose it "reads" better because we are used to reading left-to-right?
 

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Very interesting, I somehow like it better flipped, I have no idea why.

But to be blatantly honest, I don't really get much out of this. I like the idea, but I wish that there were more in the frame, there's nothing really to keep your eye on the photo.
 
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Eldrich -- thanks for the honesty. (I think that the flipping helps because of the sense of action, and how we usually read left to right -- just my idea.)

Would it be fair to rephrase your criticism as "there is no strong subject in this photo"?
 

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yes thats pretty much what I was thinking. For me, the blowing snow is just a little too much of a blur to be the only thing in the photo. Which is why I think I would like it much more if the subject were the snow blowing off of a recognizable roof, rather than mostly being the snow...but thats just me
 

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