some CC please...

[HonCBRf4i]

How can I improve these shots:

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4.

 

[rateeg]

what light did u use?

 

[MohaimenK]

when working w/ black outfit with black background, always put a light behind subject so it creates a separation around the edges. Move her and the bike another 5 ft forward because you're getting light on the background. The poses just look odd, especially #2.

1 is the best out of the bunch

 

[ayeelkay]

I prefer number one as well, I'd just crop out some of the excess black on the right side. I really like the pose, and really the shot as a whole, but I would recommend more light on the models face and eyes.

 

[JimCoventry]

Separation. Separation Separation.

Needs kicker(s) and hair lights to separate subject from BKG and more believable poses

 

[gsgary]

I will reshoot them for that TZR, is that first one an old YD ?
You need to move her at least 5 feet from the background softbox at 45deg front and one from behind high as a hair light

 

[HonCBRf4i]

Thanks for the quick CC...ok, move the subject away from wall roughly about 5 feet, check...as for the light, it was a small spot light that was about 10 feet away and I used it to high light the model's legs in the shot with the TZR. The white YM-1, I used the shops over head lights and adjusted my F-stop and shutter speed to compensate.

I am by now means a professional and was working with what I had available to me.

Here is number 4 but with the shadowing adjusted to eliminate the light on the floor and the wall:

 

[Karri]

I think #2 and #4 could be improved if the model was looking towards the camera and all could benefit with tighter crops. Agree with the others about needing the separation between the subject and background too. I might would try having the model point her toes more in #4 so it creates a longer line of her body...

 

[703Methane]

^^ +1
And on number four I would try moving the light over a little to get the model some more light. Her upper body is underexposed.

BTW, Is that a two brothers pipe on the R1 ?

 

[HonCBRf4i]

Ok, I can't do anything about the back lighting for the separation for now, but I did take in consideration of the other tips like cropping more on number one and four, plus I did have a shot with the model looking at me for number four...

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new 4.

 

[HonCBRf4i]

^^ +1
And on number four I would try moving the light over a little to get the model some more light. Her upper body is underexposed.

BTW, Is that a two brothers pipe on the R1 ?

It's not a R1, but a '93 Yamaha TZR 250...

 

[SabrinaO]

These are just weird, unnatural poses and angles!

 

[lildlege1]

I like #4 but the foreground is bothersome to me idk thats just me

I like #1 too close to background

 

[reznap]

IMO, your lighting only worked on #3. That's the only photo where both the whole model and the bike are well-lit. It would have been a much better shot with a second light or reflector at some degree to camera right. You could take some time to darken in the background - this way the shadow and the texture of the background won't really be visible. I think that would make it look better.

Also watch the wide angles.. the 12mm is too wide for shots where you don't want distortion... and usually distortion is unflattering to models (unless you want to make their legs appear to be a little longer). If you were limited on space, I guess that's a valid reason for the wide angle.. I'd want to use a 35mm prime at least for something like this, maybe even a 50mm. Of course then you'd have to be able to back up quite a bit.

 

[HonCBRf4i]

These are just weird, unnatural poses and angles!

She is posing on a motorcycle what kind of natural pose could you suggest? There are only so many ways to have someone pose on a motorcycle, I was trying to be creative and different from all of the other images you find on google...