The low viewing angle and the composition are good attempts and the subdued color seems to fit the content but, IMO, neither of these pictures are effective in the long run..
There are three things that hurt the picture's impact. First, the glass wall at the end of the building is relatively large, without much interest and OOF.
Second, the wall on the right, which might have added some interest and tension to the composition picture is cut so short that the only impact it has is have is to show the keystoneing of the image.
Third, the female jogger and the other couple in shorts and running shoes remove all the mystery from the picture and keep the viewer in 'current time'.