Yes, that is better.
I think that it's very important to get the horizon straight when there is water. Otherwise it just looks very unnatural. Of curse, rules were made to be broken, but if you do tilt the horizon, really tilt it.
The clouds are a bit blown out, that's sometimes tough to avoid in a scene like this.
A circular polarizer would have been good for a shot like this. You could probably have made the sky a fair bit darker and/or adjusted how the reflection on the water looks.
Overall, I like this shot. The sense of distance from the receding mountains is a nice effect.