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[sarallyn]

c&c appreciated

 

[teneighty23]

i love the smoke on the right, that window looks so great, such character!

 

[invisible]

For the life of me I can't think of how each photo relates to each other.

Separately:

The eye is tremendously beautiful, but what predominates here is the hair (due to its position in the frame and the amount of light hitting it). I'd suggest lightening the eye, which was probably your focus but seems underexposed. The strand of hair curved to the left adds a nice frame to the face.

The second image is more interesting, in my opinion. The smoke obviously is what makes it appealing, and the fact that we can't see the source of the smoke adds some mystery. I like the light. I'm assuming that what I'm looking at on the bottom left side is a bed, but there's not enough info in the image which is cool. I think the "thingy" on the left side (close to the window) is a bit distracting and adds nothing, but that's just me.

In brief, I like both images.

 

[sarallyn]

thanks so much for critiquing -- i'll work on it... I have some different eye pictures, so i'll toy with that.
they really are related -- I guess it's more of an inside thing (kind of hard to explain).

 

[sarallyn]

updated image (added contrast to the eye, burned the hair a bit, cropped the bed);

 

[invisible]

Yeah, in my opinion this second edit is better.

I browsed your deviantart gallery. You have some really nice shots there; I particularly liked "Slow Night" and "Please Throw", and also some of the Dylana portraits.

 

[sarallyn]

thanks

and of course, your gallery is stunning. I would have a very hard time choosing a favorite -- I absolutely love the Northwest coast.

 

[Battou]

Where these taken with the AE-1 or the Nikon?

 

[sarallyn]

nikon

 

[Battou]

Is that artificial grain or noise?


Whitch ever it may be I might try to suppress it a little bit in the blacks, It looks fine in the greys but stands out in the black arias too much fin my oppinion.

 

[sarallyn]

nah, the ISO was jacked way up.
do you think bumping the contrast would help?

 

[Battou]

nah, the ISO was jacked way up.
do you think bumping the contrast would help?

To be completely honest with you I don't know. The contrast is fine as is I feel so adjusting it to attempt to suppress noise would throw if off.

Is this a color convert or shot in BW mode?

 

[sarallyn]

it's a convert, but it's so flat originally it might as well of been shot in b/w mode.

 

[Battou]

it's a convert, but it's so flat originally it might as well of been shot in b/w mode.

I'm assuming you have Photoshop, Correct?

Go back into your original color photo:

Filter -->

• Noise
  • Reduce Noise
    • Streingth - 0
    • Preserve Details - 0
    • Reduce Color Noise - 100
    • Sharpen Details - 0
    • Remove Jpeg artifact - unchecked

And then reconvert as before and see what that does for you.

 

[sarallyn]

I just looked for the original image, but it seems i've converted it. i'll play around in ps to see what I can do...