Willy-Brandt-Platz

[Fred Berg]

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[jenko]

Nice set! I would switch #4 & #5. We get the hint of the building in #3 and #5 would take us through that window to complete the idea. I would move #4 too, but I'm not sure where. I just like #6 as a continuation of the external space, then back to the door, then maybe #4?

Also, wonder if you could tighten up the last shot just a bit.

Overall, really enjoyed this visual story of a place. Thanks.

 

[Fred Berg]

Nice set! I would switch #4 & #5. We get the hint of the building in #3 and #5 would take us through that window to complete the idea. I would move #4 too, but I'm not sure where. I just like #6 as a continuation of the external space, then back to the door, then maybe #4?

Also, wonder if you could tighten up the last shot just a bit.

Overall, really enjoyed this visual story of a place. Thanks.

Thanks ever so much, that's just the sort of input I was hoping for - very helpful. I'm glad you enjoyed it and that a story came across; I wasn't sure whether I'd captured the essence of the place or not.

 

[Designer]

Fred; for me this doesn't read as any kind of sequence, nor even of the same place. You've got a mixture of building parts that don't seem to belong together, IMO.

Personally, I like to see the building as an experiential sequence; long shots, approach, entrance, interior circulation, interior details, even places that are not normally open to the general public, if possible. I'm not a big fan of graffiti.