First Communion Picture

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  1. J.E.

    J.E. TPF Noob!

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    Okay, so this is me, ages ago. First Communion. Excuse the horrible 80's hair. Nobody asked me, I had no say with it. So useless to critique how horrible the fringe/pony looks. ;)

    Okay, obviously I'm not after critique on the shot itself, either, as I can't claim to have taken it. I had to work with what I had, which was this... a rather ordinary snapshot.

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    For my grandmas photo-calendar I scanned the above pic and PS'd it. I think I improved it...

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    Anyway, I'm not sure about it. It's good enough for grams' photo calendar, that's for sure, but some things don't 'feel' right, only I don't know which exactly.

    So what do you think about the following aspects:

    1. The catchlights in the eyes? There obviously were none and I added them to give my eyes a more lively look. Only I'm not quite sure how well 'artificial' catchlights work. Are they okay? Too obviously PS'd?

    2. The vignetting? It kind of dulls the corners down, I find? I wanted the shot to become a little softer and to give it some 'glow', but I don't know if I'm happy with it. What else could I have done?

    3. The flame of the candle? Sometimes I think it's obvious it wasn't part of the picture originally (especially as I added it after vignetting the borders, duh!), sometimes I think it blends in well. Seems to depend on what time of the day it is. I don't know. What do you think?

    4. Anything else that feels weird/not right/overdone?

    Thank you for looking. I'm really hoping for some enlightenment here, so just be as honest as you can. :blushing:
     
  2. Parago

    Parago TPF Noob!

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    I think you did an amazing job. Flame and all. I like it. It's very hmm.. let's say 'classic' but hey - it's a first communion picture and it's for Grandma. Perfect. :thumbup:
     
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    Ditto, I think this is a stupendous job and one anyone should be proud of.
    IMO, the flame is fine, as is the vignetting.

    The only suggestion I might have is to make her a little lower in the frame so as to leave a little more room above her head and get her eyes down on the third line.

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  4. Torus34

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    If Grandma likes it, it's great. You have a specific 'client', and nothing matters except pleasing her.
     
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    I think Grams will be pleased. Good job.

    There are a couple things to try to see if you like them better when you look side by side: Burn the eyes a bit to reduce the shadows/bags. (You certainly don't have bags under your eyes now and really, really didn't then <grin>) Move your catchlight edit over to the right (subject's left) so they look as though they are 'catching' the candle's glow. Maybe about a 2:30 position. The candle is actually lower than that, but the catchlights below level will look really hokey, I think.

    I'm not sure this will make any huge difference, but may be worth fiddling with a bit.

    Again, Good Job!
     
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    The_Traveler Completely Counter-dependent Supporting Member

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    Don't you mean to dodge the bags?
    The healing brush or patch tool would work here also.
     

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