I've looked at these several times, and I want to like them if for nothing but the effort in staging. On my monitor they all look slightly underexposed, but I assume that was to add to the "dark and sinister look". I like the B&W but dislike the blue cast. Quick edit of your B&W which I still think represents the sinister look, but highlights all the other good things you captured especially the grain/noise. LR adjustments Temp#7, Contrast +10, Exposure +.25, Highlight +5, Shadow +52, Black +40, Clarity +33, Vibrance +26, sharpen 45, luminance 5. I forgot to do, it, but I'd suggest cropping or clone out the fingertips. Just my opinion, but I believe your color versions would benefit from an adjustment to WB also.
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