#1: It can do with a bit of a crop. That car is mega distracting and ruins the mood.
#2: Bad expression and I would've had her lose the plastic jewelry.
#3: Grass is really dried out and the background is distracting. Interesting composition, though.
#4: Looks like every MySpace photo out there, eek.
#5: Again, bad expression, distracting background. Could have used some fill light on her face.
#6: Unfortunate placement of the pole makes it look like she just ran into it.
#7: Yay!!! We can see an eye! Too bad the plastic lei is just cheezy.
#8: Why didn't you remove the Omega Fish oil bottle??? Watch your backgrounds! Otherwise, the concept of this photo is great!
#9: Again, inclusion of Gobstoppers and Cheerios ruined what would've been a great shot of her reflection in the CD, making it become a secondary item instead of the focus of the image.
#10: I wonder if this would've been better had you reversed the focus.
In each photo, I can see what you were trying to do. With more practice I think you'll be able to transfer what you're thinking into a great photo.
Also, in the future, can you post these without them being attached sideways. It made it very difficult to view and reply about them, as I had to scroll up and across between each review and picture. You'll probably get more replies if you don't post them this way.
Marian