Hey Bee. I think the crop is just fine. I like tight shots. The composition is nice. If you're looking for constructive criticism, I think one of the main things I'd have to understand is what kind of image you're going for. Without knowing what you're going for, I will tell you that the photo looks like a screencap from an old John Cassavetes film (Something like "Shadows")... Or even similar to a Jean-Luc Godard french new wave-ish picture.
The face is a bit overexposed, yadda yadda. But all that stuff really doesn't matter all that much - People break "rules" and "guidelines" all the time and sometimes it completely changes the way other photographers think/view about their imagery. The main question is... As the photographer, are you happy with it? If not, what do you not like about it?