Boat Builder

[Rick58]

Looks great! If you wanted the wood shavings to be significant you should of got in there focusing on her hands.


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[curtyoungblood]

The focus doesn't really seem to be on the pile of wood shavings to me. It looks to be on the board with screws in it. The wood shavings may also be in focus, but they're in a highlight area that is pretty close to being blown out, so a lot of the detail is lost.

 

[DanielMichael]

I wasn't being critical just observant. Me or anybody saying "what I would have done" doesn't do this wonderful picture any justice. Great effort, wonderful photo. Now I have to find myself a boat builder.


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[Rick58]

Thanks for that Dan, but a miss is a miss. I guess the sun will still rise and set.

 

[photoguy99]

Honestly, I think it was a great exercise. It might be just me, but I seem to find myself shooting everything twice. The first time is a rough stab at something, and then I go have a think. Next time you're there, you'll have some concrete ideas to try out.

It's all part of a process.

 

[Tabe]

I think this is a wonderful photo, just perhaps not what you were going for. The wood shavings aren't in focus - the boards to their left are - but that's OK. This photo tells the story of a craftsman hard at work at her craft. I'm OK with that. A much tighter focus on her hands and the shavings might work better for your original idea but this photo as executed is by no means a "delete me now!"

 

[snowbear120 51]

For the shavings as the focal point, I think I'd have moved to the right (put boat on my left) and maybe gone with a longer lens, backing up if possible.

 

[Didereaux]

Longer lens would bring those chips in closer. You'd sacrifice the scene though.

The pic looks like something out of 'This Old Boat'/'Wooden Boat(?)....that's a good thing!

 

[D-B-J]

I would have maybe placed some shavings closer to you so they were larger, and the increased separation would have helped with blowing out the background. I'm sure a long lens would work well, but I think it might also be fun to play with the distortion of a wider lens. Get those shavings real close and have fun!

 

[pgriz]

I'm thinking the opposite of a telephoto. Do you have an UWA? Then getting really close to the chips will make them large in the frame, and the hands/tools will recede. Using the UWA to stretch out the separation between the foreground and midground may give you the necessary emphasis. Personally, I really like the image, even tho you may be thinking you missed conveying the intent. I agree with other posters who noted that the rest of the place doesn't really contribute, as the key points are the builder and her hands, the frame, and the chips.

 

[Rick58]

Thanks Paul, 28 prime is as wide as I go, but I see where you were going with your idea. Several people have mentioned a tighter crop and lose some of the shop. I was a little leery of that due to losing the "shop feel", but now feel I was wrong. A crop similar to this would actually be much stronger while only losing a minimal amount of the boat frame . Next time...

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[weepete]

I really like it Rick, you've got a nice depth of field here with the shavings in focus which has an effect of concentrating on the process and the skill ss opposed to a portrait of the builder. The lines of the boat work really well too.

If anything I'd consider cropping a wee bit off the top, just because I think it's space that doesn't need to be there.

But it is a cool image the way it is. And I used to work in manufacturing so I'm used to building custom projects that take quite a bit of skill to achieve.

(Oops, missed the above post, that first crop is grand!)

 

[Rick58]

thanks, but which..Horizontal or vertical crop?

 

[weepete]

Vertical for me mate