C&C for this troll

[L1ttleslugger]

They have great potential. But they need the right crop so that they "pop". The girl leaning against the left wall needs to get rid of some of the wall on the left for example. The purple is nice but it might pop better if cropped out. Play around with the crop centering and size until they all "pop"

Why do you have such sever vignetting? Light fall off? 50mm lens with 2 filters stacked? Post processing?

I also see perhaps the best tip you will get on this forum. You have a tendency to place the eyes near center at the expense of a better composition. Don't make that mistake. All your shots show that something was sacrificed to sort of keep the eyes from getting too far away from the center. all the photos are lacking subject matter at the bottom because of this. The second and the last one especially reveals this where her fingertips are almost visually snipped off for no good reason.

With the proper crop these photos will be awesome.

Thank you. The vignetting is all pp. I don't ussually use any I just wanted to try it out? To much? I like the way it kinda points out the subject more on center weighted shots. But I can see where to much is to much.

 

[L1ttleslugger]

1, 2 4, and 5 I get this stange feeling she's on the ground with that rock background so these positions seemed strangely awkward. I know its an illusion. I do like the editing but 3,4 and 5 seem underexposed to me and a flash could've helped.

4 & 5 I believe was due to editing while 3 was in my opinion underexposed. But I really liked the shot even without having her face. But yes there was flash maybe bump it a Little higher?

 

[L1ttleslugger]

Well, when "your stuff" is a person, and you mean to take portraits, you should NOT listen to peoples' advice to put "your stuff more centred". It gives your otherwise good photos (and they are ok, apart from their composition) a sense of "snapshottish", I'm afraid. And you don't want THAT to happen to your photography, I assume, not with THAT camera you use... :shock: !!!

Yes and thank you very much. I don't want that to happen, portraits is a bit of a new field for me so everything you guys are saying really helps

 

[L1ttleslugger]

Two words - fill light (or supplimental light).

She has racoon eyes in a couple of the shots, like the first one and the last one.

I think having the subject 6 to 10 feet from the wall would have allowed you to separate her from the background lighting wise, which is a more accepted definition of 'pop'.

Oh, 1st and last should also have been made in the vertical (portrait) orientation IMO.

Gotcha watch out for racoon eyes.
And move her from the wall to blur out the wall making her stand out and therefore "popping"

 

[canonguy12]

Have her step away from it so that it can be blurred.

+1:thumbup:

That was the first thing that I noticed, have her step away- which will increase the distance from background to camera for more DOF

 

[L1ttleslugger]

Why not use the stone wall more creatively?

Have her step away from it so that it can be blurred. Click

Change your position so the wall is a secondary subject. Click

Just a thought.

EDIT:
Meant to add, she is lovely.
And Keith is right about adding some fill.

Ok got it. Never thought to use the wall as a second subject. Thank you for the input. I'll keep that in mind next time

 

[sobolik]

They have great potential. But they need the right crop so that they "pop". The girl leaning against the left wall needs to get rid of some of the wall on the left for example. The purple is nice but it might pop better if cropped out. Play around with the crop centering and size until they all "pop"

Why do you have such sever vignetting? Light fall off? 50mm lens with 2 filters stacked? Post processing?

I also see perhaps the best tip you will get on this forum. You have a tendency to place the eyes near center at the expense of a better composition. Don't make that mistake. All your shots show that something was sacrificed to sort of keep the eyes from getting too far away from the center. all the photos are lacking subject matter at the bottom because of this. The second and the last one especially reveals this where her fingertips are almost visually snipped off for no good reason.

With the proper crop these photos will be awesome.

Thank you. The vignetting is all pp. I don't ussually use any I just wanted to try it out? To much? I like the way it kinda points out the subject more on center weighted shots. But I can see where to much is to much.

I read a pro comment somewhere that escapes me that said something like this. When you see darkened edges it is a sure sign that an amateur figures that they will look like a pro did them. Usually darkened edges look rather dumb. Not always but usually. Much better to wash out the edges. I think this photo http://www.thephotoforum.com/forum/...orum-photo-gallery/227483-i-took-picture.html is rather artistic. Many think it is a mistake.

Darkening and lightening of edges requires a good touch and a receptive audience. But if it is only for you then do whatever trips your trigger. My house is full of what others consider to be "off"

 

[L1ttleslugger]

They have great potential. But they need the right crop so that they "pop". The girl leaning against the left wall needs to get rid of some of the wall on the left for example. The purple is nice but it might pop better if cropped out. Play around with the crop centering and size until they all "pop"

Why do you have such sever vignetting? Light fall off? 50mm lens with 2 filters stacked? Post processing?

I also see perhaps the best tip you will get on this forum. You have a tendency to place the eyes near center at the expense of a better composition. Don't make that mistake. All your shots show that something was sacrificed to sort of keep the eyes from getting too far away from the center. all the photos are lacking subject matter at the bottom because of this. The second and the last one especially reveals this where her fingertips are almost visually snipped off for no good reason.

With the proper crop these photos will be awesome.

Thank you. The vignetting is all pp. I don't ussually use any I just wanted to try it out? To much? I like the way it kinda points out the subject more on center weighted shots. But I can see where to much is to much.

I read a pro comment somewhere that escapes me that said something like this. When you see darkened edges it is a sure sign that an amateur figures that they will look like a pro did them. Usually darkened edges look rather dumb. Not always but usually. Much better to wash out the edges. I think this photo http://www.thephotoforum.com/forum/...orum-photo-gallery/227483-i-took-picture.html is rather artistic. Many think it is a mistake.

Darkening and lightening of edges requires a good touch and a receptive audience. But if it is only for you then do whatever trips your trigger. My house is full of what others consider to be "off"

i 100% agree with you. which is why i am fine with taking criticism. some people like center weighted photos, like those that told me to do it. some like using the rule of thirds. i ussually underexpose most of my stuff cause i like it a bit darker. its all preference. its how the audience you present it to will see it. which is why i asked for c&c. everyone sees different things in pictures and posting on a forum for criticism imo gets you an average of opinions from a wide range of people.

and again thank you to everyone that has posted i greatly appreciate it.:thumbup: