Model/fashion work is a whole different ballgame; details count. They count a LOT! One thing that leaps out at me from this image is her left eye; the lid is partially closed and bisecting the pupil. I think this might have been stronger shot in portrait orientation, and with a bit more contrast on her skin, but you've nailed the focus, and the exposure is good, just maybe not quite as exciting as we would wish.
That's what 11 looks like today?