C&C per req:
Both images are classic, 'though not especially exciting or interesting studies in depth of field. While I'm not a fan of the angles, that's a personal choice. I will say that while both are significantly under-exposed, your monochrome conversion seems well done. Even though you've used a large aperture and have a shallow DoF, be cognizant of your backgrounds; there is still enough detail in #2 to make the background quite distracting.
Just my $00.02 worth - your mileage may vary.
~John