couple more from our day at the park

[SoonerBJJ]

Both from 5DMk3 with 135/2L.

 

[tirediron]

Love the expression & lighting in #2; just wish there was more room in the frame.

 

[SoonerBJJ]

Interesting comment on #2 because I've been struggling with the crop. I was tracking her while jacking with the focus points and cut off her fingertips. (aarghhh) The full frame contains lovely light and bokeh but makes the cut fingers look sloppy, whereas in the closer, less conventional crop it was less obvious. Maybe even intentional. Not sure if that makes any sense, but that was my rationale.

 

[SoonerBJJ]

By traditional rules of composition I should've left a leading space in her direction of travel, but something about this appeals to me. And, I suppose I'm breaking the rules to de-emphasize my own mistake.

 

[tirediron]

Fair enough; "little bits of people" cropped off is a HUGE peeve of mine. Looking at the image, I think cropping just above the cuff of the left (image right) arm might work well and avoid that "oops" look...

 

[SoonerBJJ]

HUGE peeve of mine, too. I was kicking myself when I realized what I'd done. Thanks for the feedback, I'll have to work with that and see what I can do.

 

[Derrel]

I do not mind the "as in a painting" style of composition in the second shot; that is a style where the subject touches, or almost touches, at least three sides of the frame's edges. On this photo, I think it actually works well to crop right into the fingertips! For me, this shot works. It has "feeling". It has nice lighting, good processing, and a good subject, and to me, the framing is perfectly fine. Her line of gaze, down and out of the frame,her placement at the left-most side of the frame makes it feel like she is MOVING...moving through SPACE...moving through the FRAME. Having her fingers clipped, and the top of the head cropped is, as mentioned, something that's expected in a photo that is made using the as-in-a-painting style of composition.

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The first shot is a nice picture of your darling daughter, but that large empty white space....ehhh...that really hurts the shot.

These two frames do show how wonderful the Canon 135/2-L lens is at selective focus work. It's a sweet optic.

 

[The_Traveler]

I like them both
the first is overexposed somewhere and that would hurt (note teh half-moon blanched areas under the eyes and on the cheeks

 

[SoonerBJJ]

Thank you, Derrel, for articulating what I could not. I knew I liked it but couldn't explain why. And thank you for giving the compositional device a name. Learned something today.

And both good points about the exposure and empty space.