I think this would work better if the light was coming from higher and farther camera left (and the guy wasn't wearing what appears to be a stained t-shirt).
Yeah true.. the guy kinda just walked into the set lol but I decided to try take advantage of that (there was a lot of people walking around and into the set)
Lighting-wise you are totally right, that is what I realized as soon as I started snapping pictures. But this being one of my very first photoshoots, I showed up totally unprepared with one bare flash on a tripod lol. Ehhh you live, you learn...