Fresh From High School, Into The Real World ~ Winnie Tang

[JohnKokWithAdSLR]

This is Winnie

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The Rain Which Never Stops Falling

C & C welcome, please be harsh as possible, I wish to learn

EXIF
#1 - 1/100, f2.8, ISO 800, 50 mm
#2 - 1/125, f2.8, ISO 800, 50 mm
#3 - 1/100, f2.8, ISO 800, 50 mm
#4 - 1/160, f2.8, ISO 800, 50 mm
#5 - 1/250, f2.8, ISO 800, 50 mm

Sorry about the small pictures, got bigger ones here



Artistically Scientific Side of Things

I am mainly here for technical improvement but please allow me the opportunity to share a little bit about my actual work.

All these photos that I posted all along are actually from my invention of an article that I hope can help us, through pictures and words, understand another person to a certain degree.

Rather than on a per-picture basis, kindly consider my work through an overall point of view, piecing together all the photos and words into a bigger picture.

The full article for Winnie is here -> Full Article

I would be grateful for any feedback at all as they are valuable for my experiment’s progress. Thank you ;-)

 

[Davor]

Harsh eh, ok ill try my best here. and maybe someone else can fill in the rest

She is really beautiful and has great potential, but as a photographer you have allot to learn in order to bring out the best in her as a model. I read the article and my opinions will reflect on that.

1. Seems to unnatural for her pose, and your background completely ignores what you where trying for. The railing behind her has blown whites which creates a distraction from the subject and overall the picture is not straight, should be straightened clockwise. Im guessing you where metering off the subject but not using flash, in environments like this having a flash is essential to portraits especially of its brighter behind the subject. Meter off the brightest area and use Flash for fill light.

2. Its not bad, but the subject is not lit up properly so the background seems to drag more attention. And IMO her clothing was not fiting for this shoot, the patterns and colors are all over the place. I also noticed that she kind of slouching forward, next time have the subject lean their back against the glass or wall i will look much more appealing.

3. Better pose than the first one but same mistakes; crooked picture, blown whites, bad composition.

4. Just looks like a snapshot to me, it doesn't really tell much and the crop feels weird.

5. I don't get that feeling at all, i cannot see anything falling the only falling going on is the composition and the out of focus. the window behind her blends in to much with her skin tones.

My advice is, even if its on camera flash use it it will benefit you by allot. If you don't have an off camera flash, invest in one. These are hard spaces to work in with just ambient lights, since its brighter outside than inside and you have no light to balance it all out. I think she would look better if you got her to wear better outfit or dress, this just doesn't work for me.

just my two cents.

 

[JohnKokWithAdSLR]

Harsh eh, ok ill try my best here. and maybe someone else can fill in the rest

She is really beautiful and has great potential, but as a photographer you have allot to learn in order to bring out the best in her as a model. I read the article and my opinions will reflect on that.

1. Seems to unnatural for her pose, and your background completely ignores what you where trying for. The railing behind her has blown whites which creates a distraction from the subject and overall the picture is not straight, should be straightened clockwise. Im guessing you where metering off the subject but not using flash, in environments like this having a flash is essential to portraits especially of its brighter behind the subject. Meter off the brightest area and use Flash for fill light.

2. Its not bad, but the subject is not lit up properly so the background seems to drag more attention. And IMO her clothing was not fiting for this shoot, the patterns and colors are all over the place. I also noticed that she kind of slouching forward, next time have the subject lean their back against the glass or wall i will look much more appealing.

3. Better pose than the first one but same mistakes; crooked picture, blown whites, bad composition.

4. Just looks like a snapshot to me, it doesn't really tell much and the crop feels weird.

5. I don't get that feeling at all, i cannot see anything falling the only falling going on is the composition and the out of focus. the window behind her blends in to much with her skin tones.

My advice is, even if its on camera flash use it it will benefit you by allot. If you don't have an off camera flash, invest in one. These are hard spaces to work in with just ambient lights, since its brighter outside than inside and you have no light to balance it all out. I think she would look better if you got her to wear better outfit or dress, this just doesn't work for me.

just my two cents.

thank you very much for your pointers =) I will take my time to digest them

 

[Bitter Jeweler]

Your titles never jive with your pictures.

 

[SrBiscuit]

Your titles never jive with your pictures.

Agreed...the "real world" is the mall?

The pics are nice, but the setting is not what I would have chosen. What's the story you're trying to tell with these?

I would have called it "teen, doing what she loves."

 

[JohnKokWithAdSLR]

Your titles never jive with your pictures.

Agreed...the "real world" is the mall?

The pics are nice, but the setting is not what I would have chosen. What's the story you're trying to tell with these?

I would have called it "teen, doing what she loves."

lolz thats one way to look at it

 

[ZacFreeland]

Straighten them up some in photoshop. 2 is the only one that's doing much for me.