For me, there's too little information, and the information presented is blown out.
Best,
Jake
"Rub the wet negative in a tray full of lint and sand, then hang dry" is not a typical set of developing instructions. Why is it so dirty (presumably by choice)? Doesn't seem to fit the theme.
Otherwise, I think it's fine including being so stark, but would make the hands and face and eensy bit brighter at least and the screen an eensy bit darker.