I kinda hate it too. I might like it if the light didn't get more normal at the bottom of the frame. Either flare out the whole frame, or dump the flare. This almost-but-not-quite business is no good.
JPEG artifacts in the hair, or does it really look like that, with the weird chunky black shadows popping out from the flare?
The clothes are ridiculous, but that's presumably not your fault? It's Fashion, maybe, but I'm not sure I'm even buying that.
All that said, I think there's some interesting ideas in here, and the potential for a very strong "look" built around those ideas. The execution needs to be sharpened up and clarified, though.